One of my big goals of 2015 was to
finish a few bigger projects, particularly two of my YA manuscripts, Agatha Abel Meets Her Maker (which I
did! And it was shortlisted earlier in the year for The Text Prize) and Dig Up Your Own Bones, and an adult
manuscript, The Rabbits, which I took
on my residency at the Katharine Susannah Prichard Writers Centre at the end of
2014 and to Tin House in July. It’s been a lot of work but something I feel really
proud of. Working on these three massive projects has sharpened my process when
it comes to writing longer work, and made me stretch my creativity,
particularly when it comes to the fundamentals of story.
As I’ve been working on The Rabbits, I’ve been thinking a lot
about story beginnings. A big part of this is probably because I’ve rewritten
the opening to it about eight times
now and have struggled with it in a way I haven’t before. After all, a story
beginning has a lot of work to do. It’s got to introduce characters and time
period and setting, lay the foundation of tone and theme, all the while acting
as the entry point for your readers.
In other words, it’s got to
contextualise your story.
Usually, I find my beginning through
my characters. My protagonists, as cliché as it is to say, talk to me. They
tell me where their story starts, and I’ll write it in the first draft, and
revisit it in later ones, as the way the story unfolds inevitably reinforms that
opening. That said, the changes I make from the first written ones rarely alter
dramatically. That hasn’t been the case with The Rabbits, and I think it’s probably because there are more Point
of View characters sharing the protagonist role. This story is about a family
falling apart after a son goes missing and it’s split my attention between
mothers and sisters and brothers, and it’s made me revisit beginnings I love to
try and find the right tone and order for it.
One of my favourite openings is from
one of my favourite novels, The House of
the Spirits by Isabel Allende. It starts:
‘Barrabas came to us by sea, the child Clara
wrote in her delicate calligraphy. She was already in the habit of writing down
important matters, and afterward, when she was mute, she also recorded
trivialities, never suspecting that fifty years later I would use her notebooks
to reclaim the past and overcome terrors of my own.
Barrabas
arrived on a Holy Thursday. He was in a despicable cage, caked with his own
excrement and urine, and had the lost look of a hapless, utterly defenceless
prisoner; but the regal carriage of his head and the size of his frame bespoke
the legendary giant he would become.’
For me, this is basically perfect.
There are three storythreads in fewer paragraphs, and they weave together
impeccably. Allende masters the broad setup while also writing incredibly
personably and intimately. You want to know about Barrabas and the narrator and
Clara too – the character setup is balanced and it works.
You can be vaguer though. Another one
I love -
‘Almost
everyone thought the man and the boy were father and son.
They crossed
the country on a rambling southwest line in an old Citroen sedan, keeping
mostly to secondary roads, traveling in fits and starts. They stopped in three
places before reaching their final destination: first in Rhode Island, where
the tall man with black hair worked in a textile mill; then in Youngstown,
Ohio, where he worked for three months on a tractor assembly line; and finally
in a small California town near the Mexican border, where he pumped gas and
worked at repairing small, foreign cars with an amount of success that was, to
him, surprising and gratifying.’
You can
pretty much put any of Stephen King’s openers on a list like this, but ‘Salem’s Lot’s is probably my favourite.
Both distancing and somehow intimate, much like Allende’s, King keeps a bit of
a further separation, but poses a more direct set of questions. Where are the
man and the boy going and how do they relate to each other? They’re questions
that won’t be answered for a long time, but they’ll weigh the narrative at
every turn.
Another step
back.
The Turn of the Screw by Henry James doesn’t even start
with the protagonist:
‘The story
had held us, round the fire, sufficiently breathless, but except the obvious remark
that it was gruesome, as on Christmas Eve in an old house a strange tale should
essentially be, I remember no comment uttered til somebody happened to note it
as the only case he had met in which such a visitation had fallen on a child.
The case, I may mention, was that of an apparition in just such an old house as
had gathered us for the occasion – an appearance, of a dreadful kind, to a
little boy sleeping in the room with his mother and waking her up in the terror
of it; waking her not to dissipate his dread and sooth him to sleep again, but
to encounter also herself.’
The themes
are there, the crux of the story, but we don’t meet the Governess who carries
us through this novella or the setting for a couple of pages. Instead, James
would rather draw an atmosphere and a tone, something to set the reader on edge
which, in a ghost story, is perhaps more important than a character or a place.
But what
about the opposite? What about going closer? One of the best beginnings I’ve
read recently is from Gillian Flynn’s Dark
Places. It goes like this:
‘I have a
meanness inside me, real as an organ. Slit me at my belly and it might slide
out, meaty and dark, drop on the floor so you could stomp on it. It’s the Day
blood. Something’s wrong with it. I was never a good little girl, and I got
worse after the murders. Little Orphan Libby grew up sullen and boneless,
shuffled around a group of lesser relatives – second cousins and great-aunts
and friends of friends – stuck in a series of mobile homes of rotting ranch
houses all across Kansas. Me going to school in my dead sisters’ hand-me-downs:
Shirts with mustardy armpits. Pants with baggy bottoms, comically loose... In
class photos my hair was always crooked – barrettes hanging loosely from
strands, as if they were airborne objects caught in the tangles – and I always
had bulging pockets under my eyes, drunk-landlady eyes. Maybe a grudging curve
of the lips where a smile should be. Maybe.
I was not a
loveable child, and I’d grown into a deeply unloveable adult. Draw a picture of
my soul, and it’d be a scribble with fangs.’
How great is
that? It’s tone and it’s character and it’s vicious
in a way that’ll carry through the entire story. It may not tell us what’s
going to happen, or who, exactly, Libby Day is, but it gives us something
rawer. It tells us how she sees herself something we don’t often see so
explicitly drawn in novels.
You can be
more explicit. Less metaphorical or self-reflecting. The Lovely Bones by Alice Sebold
is often quoted in these things, but for good reason:
‘My name was
Salmon, like the fish; first name, Susie. I was fourteen when I was murdered on
December 6, 1973. In newspaper photos of missing girls from the seventies, most
looked like me: white girls with mousy brown hair. This was before kids of all
races and genders started appearing on milk cartons or in the daily mail. It
was back when people believed things like that didn’t happen.’
The whole
story’s there in five lines. That’s what’s happened – Susie Salmon’s been
murdered. It’s what will happen – the realisation that these things do happen and
will continue to.
Another one
I really love is On the Jellicoe Road by
Melina Marchetta. Most would rather talk about her novel, Looking for Alibrandi, but On
the Jellicoe Road was more important to me as a kid and the beginning’s
always stuck with me.
‘My father
took one hundred and thirty-two minutes to die.
It happened
on the Jellicoe Road. The prettiest road I’d ever seen, where trees made breezy
canopies like a tunnel to Shangri-La. We were going to the ocean, hundreds of
kilometres away, because I wanted to see it and my father said that it was
about time the four of us made that journey. I remember asking, ‘What’s the
difference between a trip and a journey?’ and my father said, ‘Narnie, my love,
when we get there, you’ll understand,’ and that was the last thing he ever
said.’
It’s moving
and it’s hearbreaking, and just like with Sebold’s and King’s, it poses
questions for the rest of the story to answer.
A beginning
doesn’t have to be so encompassing though. Doesn’t necessarily have to set up
theme or ending, but it does need to setup your story, whatever that may look
like.
Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s
Stone by JK Rowling
is always up there with me for openings because it does such an excellent job
of introducing the world of the story. It doesn’t start with Harry’s miserable
life at the Dursley’s or even as he steps into Hogwarts, it starts the night his
parents die, as Dumbledore puts Harry on his aunt and uncle’s doorstep. In a
chapter it introduces the magic, while showing that it is separate from
ordinary life. It backdates a war, and the people Harry’s parents were, and
then, the people his aunt and uncle are not. It’s brilliantly done, framing the
unusual against the usual and, well, contextualising the story.
I’ve tried a
lot of these approaches for The Rabbits and
think I’m mastering the balance. Revisiting beginnings like these helped
though, and reminded me the power in a good opening, so I hope it helps you
too!
Do you have
any beginnings you love? I’d love to hear about them!
